PN+JaneS


 * The Personal Narrative **

Assignment 1: Questions: "A Shirt Full of Bees" What creative strategy does the author use to begin the story?: By an anecdote What is the point (or thesis) of the narrative?: "I'm outside but I'm inside", meaning that he's physically outdoors but he's trapped in his own mind. What is 'the moment' on which the author focuses?: When he gets stung by the yellow jackets. What events are not central to the story and 'disappear in the puff of a sentence'? (It's necessary information, but detail is not needed.): "Before long there were steroid and antihistamines and all manner of stuff flowing in, and some hours later I was back home and had the radio on and the newspaper in my face, and all was back to normal". It covers several hours in a few sentences. What is the POV? First person POV. What are the key details in the story? How does the author "leave the reader thinking"?

Assignment 2: Please complete #2 on page 199 of "Narration".


 * Part II: Prewriting (post on your PN wiki page) **
 * Purpose: ** I am going to talk about how my dreams that fairies existed had been shattered because of my mother. ];

Looks like:.. a Yoda minus the green skin ;] Age: 5-8 Motivation / Objective: (What do you want?): A gift from the tooth fairy Where does the narrative take place?: My house When does the narrative take place?: When I was 8 years old. - When I was in kindergarten, I heard about the tooth fairy and asked my mom about it. - A few years later, I got my first wobbly toot, pulled it out, left it under the pillow and got a doll. After that, I did so every time my tooth started to wiggle. - One day, I see my mom in the place of a tooth fairy
 * Audience: **Mr.Stephens and peer editors
 * Thesis: **I learnt that you can't just plain out believe in something that others do without proof (e.g: an ACTUAL tooth fairy) or you'll learn the truth the hard way.
 * Description of Character ** (this is you)
 * Setting: **
 * Plot: **

As you may have assumed, before this occurred, I believed in everything from tooth fairies to garden gnomes. I went to a Christian elementary school so I had faith in God as well, but after this, I began to my doubts on these.
 * Conflict: **Every time my tooth wiggled just a little bit, I would do everything I could to pull it out. I successfully did so as I had all my teeth pulled out once before the age of nine. From tying one end to the door knob and the other on my tooth and making my mom yank the door to purposely eating difficult-to-eat food-when-your-teeth-is-wiggly like corncob to earn the satisfaction the next day of finding the lucky gift the tooth fairy had prepared for me. One day, I went to bed and I felt that something or someone was hovering around me. Scared and shocked, I woke up screaming just to find that my mom was trying to put something under my pillow. She apologized for waking me up but that wasn't my point. I was so shocked at the fact that all along, it was my mom acting as the tooth fairy that I believed in so much. Soon after, she left as it was late in the night but my disappointment was still there.

Are there any key moments in the story where dialogue would be effective? List these moments here. My short conversation with my mom after waking up.
 * Dialogue: **

List any sensory details that will be important in your narrative: sight, smells, sounds, tastes, touch, and movement. Sight: Shocked at seeing my mom rather than the fairy. Taste, touch & movement: When I describe my methods of pulling my teeth out... How did you change? What did you learn? Why is it significant?: The significance of this event is that I learnt that you can't just plain out believe in something that others do without proof (e.g: an ACTUAL tooth fairy) or you'll learn the truth the hard way.
 * Sensory Details: **
 * Reflection / Analysis section **: //<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">(this section is critical) //<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; letter-spacing: 0px; white-space: pre;"> **Reflect on progress** After revising and discussing with my partner, I realized that I didn't include the thesis on the first paragraph, but rather the third. I also noticed that I didn't include sensory details and no dialogue. I figured out that I needed to complete these before turning in my essay.